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Offline EliaG

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martial artist need criticism
« on: March 03, 2012, 05:44:03 PM »
hi everyone I would love to have some feedback and criticism on my last work.
he is about 32mm sole to top of the head if standing properly
brass armature
first layer: gs
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #1 on: March 03, 2012, 06:30:37 PM »
It looks excellent  :applause:. I'm not sure but does the left shoulder seem small. It might just be the pose though

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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #2 on: March 03, 2012, 06:35:20 PM »
Will this guy be cast?
I hope so.

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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #3 on: March 03, 2012, 06:54:26 PM »
Dear compatriot, he's AWESOME!  :notworthy: :notworthy:
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #4 on: March 03, 2012, 07:20:17 PM »
It looks to me like he's yawning.

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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #5 on: March 03, 2012, 08:28:07 PM »
lovely musculature on that.

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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #6 on: March 04, 2012, 01:18:03 PM »
The neck seems a bit too long on the first pics, although it seems OK in the last pics, so may have been a trick of the angle of the photograph.
The front of his body (pecs and abs) are very nicely detailed and chiseled, but the back seems a bit bland in comparison. Perhaps you should work on the definition of the lats, traps and lumbar region.
Similar thing happens to the arms: nice biceps, but he seems to be lacking triceps. Always remember that triceps make up two thirds of the arm volume, and have a very distinct shape.
Finally, the legs seem too thin. I think this is the most off-putting problem with the sculpture, and the only one that is evident without specifically looking for things to criticize.

All said, this is an excellent sculpt that can be made perfect with some minor corrections.
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #7 on: March 04, 2012, 02:30:07 PM »
thx to all :)

Brummie: yes it is. Both position and his supposed right dominant hand don't justify it

Ajsalium: Now I can clearly see your point on front-back surfaces

Ishil: I can't immagine how to sculpt differently a yawn from a kenshiros aaaATA!!!!

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« Reply #8 on: March 04, 2012, 10:24:49 PM »
Looks pretty good mate although some of the camera angles make it look odd. Although I've seen some martial arts fights IRL and yeah looks fairly accurate.
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #9 on: March 05, 2012, 05:26:58 PM »
very nice lines.  nice choice of pose.  why did you decide this stance and what reference material did you use?

to get a better overview of the shape you could try doing a shot from a distance
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #10 on: March 05, 2012, 08:06:28 PM »
Thank you very much Sally for your kind words!

why did you decide this stance
I was trying to give sense of motion through anatomy AND I'm a Bruce Lee fan.
The right arm could be  away from the body because of the spin of the kick, but I thought that if there is a possibility of casting him, it should be better to have more aligment (even if I had no experience of casting)
what reference material did you use?
I mainly used this:

to get a better overview of the shape you could try doing a shot from a distance
I'll surely do it tomorrow....by the way have u got any advice about minis lighting for picures?
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Re: martial artist need criticism
« Reply #11 on: March 12, 2012, 11:30:23 AM »



I took these pictures from zoom distance.....does it improve the views?
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